The Crimson Prince (Episodes 1-4)
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Ostinyo
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Lightbulb  02-28-2017, 03:14 AM -
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News
8/29/17
Episode 5 is in progress and a rework of the first 4 episodes is underway. Main changes are the character's personalities & more parts per chapter.

About
This is the beginning of a novel I have been writing in episode format. It provides the backstory of Manoyama Academy (I didn't just make a random map!). Yes, it starts off with a guy going to a school to learn about magic. No, it isn't Harry Potter. You will notice that many of the names sound Japanese, which is intentional, but it's not actually Japanese. The plan is for the first book to be 9 episodes, and the entire series would span 3 books.

Thank you to everyone that takes the time to read this and provide feedback!
This post was last modified: 08-30-2017, 12:14 AM by Ostinyo.
Clockworker
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02-28-2017, 08:55 PM -
#2
Wow.
I read the whole thing in one go and it is amazing. I didn't know you could write that well. This is great, and I wouldn't change anything, except the song ("some a little kinky"?)
This post was last modified: 02-28-2017, 08:56 PM by Clockworker.
Ostinyo
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02-28-2017, 10:29 PM -
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(02-28-2017, 08:55 PM)Clockworker Wrote: Wow.
I read the whole thing in one go and it is amazing. I didn't know you could write that well. This is great, and I wouldn't change anything, except the song ("some a little kinky"?)

;-) Thanks and ya that's why I said to ignore the song, I'm going to replace it eventually with something that actually works as a song instead of just being a poem.
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02-28-2017, 10:35 PM -
#4
I like it, very interesting and writing is good
Я женщина.
Padillac
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02-28-2017, 10:41 PM -
#5
You are an amazing author. The first chapter/episode was written very well.
Ostinyo
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02-28-2017, 11:40 PM -
#6
Thanks guys, I'm glad to hear that people are liking it. I find making up stories an enjoyable endeavor but need some people to provide criticism from different perspectives. Hopefully this novel/trilogy will come to fruition since I've never actually finished an entire book before.
Ostinyo
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03-27-2017, 03:43 PM -
#7
Bump. I added episodes 2 and 3 for anyone interested in reading them.
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Gay

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03-27-2017, 05:08 PM -
#8
(03-27-2017, 03:43 PM)Ostinyo Wrote: Bump. I added episodes 2 and 3 for anyone interested in reading them.

Nice
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The Genghis Khan
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03-31-2017, 12:54 PM -
#9
tl;dr
hi there
Ostinyo
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04-04-2017, 04:03 PM -
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(03-31-2017, 12:54 PM)The Genghis Khan Wrote: tl;dr
Smh

If anyone has actually read episode 2 or 3 please let me know what you think, right now I feel like it might be going a bit slow and perhaps I should be getting into the main plot faster.


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