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RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-3) - Communism - 04-04-2017
(04-04-2017, 04:03 PM)Ostinyo Wrote: Smh
If anyone has actually read episode 2 or 3 please let me know what you think, right now I feel like it might be going a bit slow and perhaps I should be getting into the main plot faster.
i have read it, i think its really good
it feels kinda slow but thats fine
RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-3) - Communism - 04-24-2017
Are new chapters episodes being written as of now? I'm pretty interested in this.
RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-3) - Ostinyo - 04-24-2017
(04-24-2017, 12:07 PM)I Wrote: Are new chapters episodes being written as of now? I'm pretty interested in this.
Ya I'm writing episodes 4 & 5 right now, while still making minor updates to 1-3 every so often. This is basically a rough draft so a lot of the more character building scenes could end up being cut/changed entirely later on, but the main plot will remain basically unchanged. Hopefully episode 4 will be finished within the next couple weeks.
Glad to hear your interested, do you have anything you'd suggest? I've had people say they think the main conflict doesn't arise fast enough and that it's too similar to Harry Potter, granted I'm targeting an age group of 14-25 year-olds and they're much older and don't really know much about Harry Potter.
RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-3) - Communism - 04-24-2017
No suggestions, to me I don't really feel that it's like Harry Potter, but somewhat similar in certain aspects.
It would be cool to see this in a book of sorts, if it was a book I'd probably buy it.
RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-3) - Ostinyo - 04-24-2017
Great! Making it into a book is certainly the goal.
The end result would ideally be a trilogy with the episodes divided as follows:
Book 1: Episodes 1 - 9
Book 2: Episodes 10 - 18
Book 3: Episodes 19 - 28
RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-3) - Communism - 04-24-2017
(04-24-2017, 03:04 PM)Ostinyo Wrote: Great! Making it into a book is certainly the goal.Sounds cool! Can't wait for the next episode, really enjoying it.
The end result would ideally be a trilogy with the episodes divided as follows:
Book 1: Episodes 1 - 9
Book 2: Episodes 10 - 18
Book 3: Episodes 19 - 28
RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-3) - Ostinyo - 04-24-2017
That's great, it's good to hear you're enjoying it
Maybe I'll post it on the BLF at some point too to get more readers.
RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-3) - Communism - 05-15-2017
Any new progress on new chapters? Still really interested in this.
RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-4) - Ostinyo - 05-16-2017
Alright I went ahead and finished up episode 4 right quick for you. I'll probably go through the draft later and change a bit of stuff, but you can let me know what you think of this for now.
Thanks for reading!
RE: Manoyama Files (Episodes 1-4) - Communism - 05-20-2017
(05-16-2017, 06:20 AM)Ostinyo Wrote: Alright I went ahead and finished up episode 4 right quick for you. I'll probably go through the draft later and change a bit of stuff, but you can let me know what you think of this for now.
Thanks for reading!
I read it, was very nice (as always). All I noticed was a few spelling errors or something off (I can't pinpoint where, I just remember seeing some).
i forgot like half the characters so i had to re-read :^(